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(Contains: sexual themes, violence/gore and ideologically sensitive material)
Elementary school was easy
so she thought that she could make it
through the white halls
of high school.
She figured it'd be fun
That she'd make new friends
and have a great four years
in this new building.
She was so
wrong.

The first day was a nightmare.
She was new to the neighborhood
and knew no one,
and no one wanted to know her.
People whispered nasty things
behind her back
because she was different
and she was new.
She was
alone.

Second quarter came around
and a guy started giving her
the attention that she longed for.
So she gave him all her love
and the day he came over
she gave her virginity to him
because she thought
that he loved her,
but he never
did.

He left her after that
and moved on to another girl.
A nude picture of her got around
and now people called her
a slut and a whore.
Rumors traveled and soon
people began to say that she
was a prostitute, selling her body
just to get
love.

Day after day, she grew depressed
and hated herself and this life.
She began taking razor blades
to her arms, watching as she bled.
Soon, she stopped eating
and grew thinner and thinner.
People noticed and said she was
only after the attention of others.
So she ended
her life.

She marked up her arms,
swallowed more pills, then tied
for herself a noose and tied it to
the second floor railing.
Tears streamed down her cheeks
as she bid farewell to the world
and took a deep breath
before jumping off the ledge.
That was
the end.

It's amazing how once people knew
she had committed suicide,
they started to say she was awesome,
beautiful, and kind.
Things they never said when
she was alive and well.
It's funny how people don't listen
when you're breathing,
but when you're dead
they start listening.
First of all, this poem has nothing to do with me. It is not a personal poem whereas most of mine are. And, although I can't enable critiques on here, I would appreciate them in comments if you would. And Writers--Club, would you be so kind as to critique this?

There are so many stories of teen suicides, bullying, cutting, eating disorders, and nasty rumors that just tear people apart. It's time people knock it off and start treating others the way that they want to be treated. As a Christian, I believe that God calls us to treat people the way we want to be treated, but you can be an atheist and still know that you had better treat people right. 

The saying "sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me" is a LIE. Words hurt. Words can push someone to the edge. Words can knock them down. Words have the power to start a fire and kill. So be careful of what you're saying and if someone is in need, stand up for them because they might not have any one else there. 

Yep. That's all.

God bless, guys. 
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BlackIceNordic8 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That was beautifully done. Words do hurt and it has been scientifically proven that emotional pain has severe and VISIBLE affects on the human body. Thank you for putting you work out here.
  Stay strong,
    - Iceland.
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ElectricWeasle Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much. I really appreciate the feedback. ^3^
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EmbraceTheDisco Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   Writer
I read this and cried.
This one hit me, it really did.
I can relate to most of the things said in this, and it's sad.
I don't know what else to say.
Anyways, well done, I love this.
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ElectricWeasle Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awe. you're gonna make me cry. Didn't realize my poems could impact someone so much. Huggle! 

and thank you. Love 
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EmbraceTheDisco Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   Writer
No worries. :) (Smile) 
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ElectricWeasle Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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soona15 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
I imagined it all in my head as I was reading. In my head I saw how the girl turned from say a quirk into an emo, but that's just a vague imagination from me that your words did to my brain. You have a gift. I absolutely love this piece, especially the last stanza because It's so true!! Well done :clap:
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ElectricWeasle Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank youuuu ^3^
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